The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information tlecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where rele ant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information tlecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where rele ant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information tlecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where rele ant.
The chart illustrates the production and
consumption
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of electricity for 10
countries
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in 2014. Units are measured in
billion
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kWh
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.
Overall
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, except for Germany, all states used electricity more than they produced it.
However
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, the production and the
consumption
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of electricity in China and
US
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the US
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were the highest by a significant margin,
while
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the other
countries
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were relatively close. The five highest
consumption
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countries
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were China,
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the US
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, Russia, Japan, and India with 5322
billion
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kWh
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, 3866
billion
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kWh
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, 1038
billion
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kWh
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, 856.7
billion
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kWh
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, and 698,8
kWh
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respectively.
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they all produce around 900
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Kwh
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or just higher, except for China and
US
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the US
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with 5293
billion
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kWh
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and 4099
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kWh
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respectively. The remaining 5
countries
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(Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea, Rep.
) had
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a
consumption
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of just under 500
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kWh
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. Of the 5 lowest
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, Korea, Rep., was the lowest one with about 450
billion
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kWh
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.
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, they all had a production of higher than 500
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kWh
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, except Korea, Rep. , which produced around 485
billion
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kWh
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, countries, billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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