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The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the proportion of people who have
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science
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a science
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qualification
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 between
Malaysia
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 and
Singapore
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 across four sectors.
It is clear that
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 no
qualification
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 in
science
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 for both countries
have
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has
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 the largest proportion.
In addition
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, there
are
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is
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 no clear increasing
and
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or
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 decreasing relationship from
Malaysia
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 to
Singapore
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. One of the most notable features was that
No
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no
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qualification
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 in
science
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 had
largest
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the largest
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 percentage
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in
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both
Malaysia
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 and
Singapore
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. To be specific,
Malaysia
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 had 64%,
whereas
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Singapore
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 accounted for 60%.
Furthermore
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, the other three sectors made up for less than 50%. The second largest
science
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qualification
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 was school leaving exams
around
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, around
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 35% in
Malaysia
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,
while
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Singapore
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 had 30%. Obviously,
master's
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the master's
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 degree for both states
balanced
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was balanced
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 and had
same
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the same
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 around 3%. Searching for
bachelor's
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a bachelor's
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 degree,
Singapore
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 had a tendency to become more
proportion
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proportionate
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 than
Malaysia
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from
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, from
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 20% to 10%.
However
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,
trend
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the trend
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 changed since they were in school leaving exams.
Malaysia
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 accounted for
more
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a higher
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 percentage
around
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, around
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 35% compared to
Singapore
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 (30%). As can
find
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be found
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 above,
Malaysia
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 had more
that
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than
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Singapore
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 on no
qualification
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 in
science
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between
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, between
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 65% and 60%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words science, qualification, malaysia, singapore with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • qualification
  • science
  • people
  • country
  • degree
  • diploma
  • certificate
  • number
  • compare
  • difference
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trends
  • education
  • job
  • market
  • system
  • total
  • percentage
  • feature
  • report
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