The chart below illustrates the children, men, women rate who ate five portions of fruit and vegatables daily in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The chart below illustrates the children, men, women rate who ate five portions of fruit and vegatables daily in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below illustrates the children, men, women rate who ate five portions of fruit and vegatables daily in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
The chart below illustrates the number of children, men and
women
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rate
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who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables daily in the UK between 2011 and 2008. In general,
It
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it
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can be seen
the
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that the
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proportion of people in three groups eating grain and
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vegetabels
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vegetables
daily rose
dramatiaclly
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dramatically
. except the
presentage
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percentage
of
female
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females
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rose in most other
figurs
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figures
. There was a remained consumption of fruit and
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vegetabels
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vegetables
in children and males with
a
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figurs
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figures
of 12,5% and 17,5% in
first
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the first
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three years.
Wehreas
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the number of
women
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who consumed fruit and
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vegetabels
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vegetables
increase
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increased
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gradually in
first
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the first
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five
years
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years,
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started
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starting
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at 22%.
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2006
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2006,
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women
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peaked at 25% and
then
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deacrese in
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decreased
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,
children
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while children
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reached a peak stoped at 26% in 2007.
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the men
hitted
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hit
a figure 28%
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in both 2006 and 2007.
To sum up
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, we could say that in 2007 and 2008
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,
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fugire deacres from point 35% to point 30% of
women
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who consumed
in
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fruits and
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vegetabels
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vegetables
. So the men and
female
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women
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was
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were
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the
gratest
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greatest
figure
start
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form
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from
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year
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2004 to 2008.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, vegetabels with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographic groups
  • Consumption rates
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Stable or fluctuating intake
  • Dietary recommendations
  • Public health campaigns
  • Availability of fresh produce
  • Health outcomes
  • Obesity rates
  • Heart disease
  • Diet-related conditions
  • Further research
  • Public health policy
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