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n the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or phone. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

In recent years, there has been a noticeable shift towards
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 transactions, with many people choosing to pay using credit cards or mobile payment apps.
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 it is possible that cash might eventually disappear altogether, I believe
this
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 change will take time and might not be welcomed by everyone. On one hand, the convenience of digital payments is undeniable. Paying with a phone or card is faster, more secure, and reduces the need to carry physical money.
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, many governments and businesses support going
cashless
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 as it helps reduce tax evasion and improves financial transparency.
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, a complete shift to a
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 society could exclude certain groups. Elderly people,
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, may find it challenging to adapt to new technologies.
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, those living in rural areas or without stable internet access may struggle to make digital payments.
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, some people prefer using cash for privacy reasons, as it doesn't leave a digital footprint. In conclusion,
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 a
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 future is likely, it won't happen overnight. Governments should ensure that everyone is financially included and not left behind as society becomes more digital.

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Make sure to give more specific examples to support your ideas. For instance, mention specific countries or studies to show cashless trends or issues.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use connecting words more to make the flow of your ideas smoother. This will help make your arguments clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are well-structured and summarize your points clearly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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