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The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 graph depicts the information about
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science
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the science
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qualification
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qualifications
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 held by people in two countries.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Malaysia
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 and
Singapore
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where
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apply
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had a large proportion
in
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of
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No
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no
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qualification
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qualifications
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 in
science
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.
Wheares
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Whereas
 in
Master's
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the Master's
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degree
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degree,
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 they
was
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were
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 the same
figurs
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figures
.
According to
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 what is shown, one of the most
commen
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common
 features was that
No
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no
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 qualification in
science
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 had the largest percentage in both
Malaysia
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 64%.
Wheares
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Whereas Singapore
singapore
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 gives 60%.
Additionally
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, in
Master's
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a Master's
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degree
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degree,
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 the same
persentage
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percentage
 was for
two
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the two
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 sides
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Malaysia
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, Malaysia
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 and
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singapore
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Singapore
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. One of
notable
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the notable
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wheares
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features
 in
Bachloer's
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Bachelor's
degree
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Singapore
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in Singapore
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 was advanced more than
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malaysia
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Malaysia
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, there
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there
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where
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percentage
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the percentage
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 was 20% and
Malaysia
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 was 10%.
To sum up
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, we could say that in No
qualificationin
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qualification in
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science
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science,
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 they
was having
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had
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the
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a
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 large percentage
and
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, and
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 in Master's
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degree
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degree,
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 they
was
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had
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 the same figures.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words science, malaysia, singapore, degree with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • qualification
  • science
  • people
  • country
  • degree
  • diploma
  • certificate
  • number
  • compare
  • difference
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trends
  • education
  • job
  • market
  • system
  • total
  • percentage
  • feature
  • report
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