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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. summarize the information and make a comparison.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. summarize the information and make a comparison.
The chart demonstrates the weekly spending by families in one country in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, spending on food was the highest in 1968, but it experienced a significant decrease by 2018.
In contrast
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, leisure and housing showed noticeable increases over the period. In 1968, food accounted for 35% of weekly spending, making it the largest category.
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, over the
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 years, it fell to nearly 17%.
On the other hand
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, leisure spending increased dramatically from around 8% in 1968 to almost 22% in 2018.
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, housing showed a significant rise from 10% to 18%, nearly doubling over the same period. Some categories showed little change,
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 as fuel and power and personal goods, where increases were minimal.
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, spending on household goods remained stable throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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