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The line graph compares the population growth in India and China from 2000 and gives projections until 2050, based on data from the UN Population Division.

The line graph compares the population growth in India and China from 2000 and gives projections until 2050, based on data from the UN Population Division.
The line chart provides key information published in
UN
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the UN
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populations
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Population
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 Division, about the growth proportion in India and
China
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 portions on the past 2000, to the
prejected
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projected
year
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 2050. The units are measured in
billions
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.
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, it is clear from the graph that India
are
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is
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 increasingly over the
year
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, and is projected to be
to
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apply
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the least
period
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in the future
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.
Whereas
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,
to
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the
China
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 portion began with
increase
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an increase
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,
then
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 there will be
decline
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a decline
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to
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in
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 the future
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year
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years
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.
According to
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 what is shown,
In
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in
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 2000, Indians were the least at first with over 1.0
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billions
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billion
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,
then
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beginning
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began
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 to
went upward
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increase
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. Compared to
China
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, they had
began
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begun
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 with over 1.2
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billions
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billion
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,
then
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 became
more
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apply
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higher until the
year
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 2024, with over than 1,4
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billions
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billion
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.
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then
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Then
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 went down
slight
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slightly
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amount
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apply
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to 1.4
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billions
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billion
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 exactly. In terms of the
Indians
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Indians'
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 growth
were
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was
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displays
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a dramatic
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 surge
dramatically
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apply
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. With 1,000,000,0 at
starts
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start
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,
then
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 end up with 16,000,000,0.
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,
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China
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China's
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 population started with
aproximately
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approximately
 12,500,000,0, and by 2050 is predicted to be 14,000,000,0. There
are
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will be
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 both well be higher than the
year
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of
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apply
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2000, in
the
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apply
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2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, year, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • compare
  • population growth
  • India
  • China
  • projections
  • data
  • year
  • significant
  • shift
  • trends
  • stabilize
  • challenges
  • opportunities
  • larger
  • faster
  • highlight
  • change
  • show
  • expect
  • rate
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