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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of students giving good ratings for different aspects of McGill University

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of students giving good ratings for different aspects of McGill University
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 graphic depicts the report of
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 in
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 about McGill University.
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 clearly seen that
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 Library resources had the best
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 over the
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, range of modules offered had the lowest. Student service increased the good feedback in the different
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. Teaching quality and sports
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 social facilities remained stable the comments in the
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surveys
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Students
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 Services in the first survey had 54 points
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, in the next 10
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 increased the
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 81 in 2010 and
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 at 91 in 2015.
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, the range modules offered
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 had bad feedback in the following
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, having the lowest rate in 2015 with 25. Teaching quality
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 received good comments in the
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 questionnaires, having 74 in 2005, in 2010
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 down to 72 and significantly went up to 78 in 2015.
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 library resources had the best
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 in all the
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surveys
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surveys,
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 the
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 hovered
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 one point. Sports and social facilities remained stable with 65 in the
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Vocabulary: Replace the words surveys, three, years, punctuation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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