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The charts below shows the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries ( France, Denmark , Sweden, The UK) in 2002.

The charts below shows the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries ( France, Denmark , Sweden, The UK) in 2002.
The chart compares the average number of
hours
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 worked per
week
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 by employees in the industrial sector across four European countries , France,
Denmark
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,
Sweden
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, and the
UK
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 , in the year 2002.
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, the
UK
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 had the longest average working
week
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 in the industrial sector in 2002,
while
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 France had the shortest.
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 showed similar working
hours
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, falling between the two extremes. The data highlights notable differences in industrial work culture across these four European countries. In 2002, workers in the
UK
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 had the highest average working
hours
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, at around 42
hours
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 per
week
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.
This
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 figure was significantly higher than in France, where employees worked only about 35
hours
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 a
week
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.
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 had similar working
hours
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, both just under 39
hours
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 weekly.
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Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 had the same working
hours
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 duration,
Denmark
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’s figure was slightly higher. The
UK
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 stood out with a much longer workweek compared to all the other countries, indicating a more demanding industrial work environment.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, denmark, sweden, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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