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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

people argue that employers should give more attenton to the workers clothes instead they should focus on the job quality. to what extented you agree or disagree? give reasons and examples

HELLO, my name is Mohamed and I
applying
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am applying
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 for
ADNOC
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the ADNOC
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company
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 in
UAE
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the UAE
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. There
many
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are many
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 reasons why I
chooise
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choose
 THE GROUP OF ADNOC,
its
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it's
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very
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a very
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poupler
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popular
company
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 in the world, and
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l
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I
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 think
its
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it's
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 a great field to show your
certiviety
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certainty
 and your
experinces
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experiences
. ADNOC is one of the biggest
commany
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companies
 in the
oil
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 field.
Oil
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 is
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an essntail
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essntail
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essential
 thing for the
laergest counrties
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largest countries
 in the world like USE,
UK
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the UK
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, and
Germeny
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Germany
. These counties depend on the
oil
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 in a big way. These reasons make
oil
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 very important. I consider
this
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company
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 a
drem
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dream
from
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for
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 me, and
l
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 will give
moe
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more
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 efforts to get to
this
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company
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I
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. I
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have many skills to give
a
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apply
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good work.
l
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 can speak 3
languges
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languages
,
l
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 have learn
programing
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programming
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 and much more. I have been
work
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working
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 20 years in the
oil
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feild
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field
 and know many
thing
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things
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 about it,
whick
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which
make
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makes
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 me an
experts
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expert
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 in
this
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 area.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay needs a clear introduction and conclusion. Start by stating your main point. End with a strong closing statement.
task achievement
Make sure to include specific examples to support your reasons. This helps make your argument stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling mistakes. It is important to present your ideas clearly and correctly.
task achievement
You express a strong desire to work for ADNOC, which is good for your task response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • superficial aesthetics
  • productivity
  • cultivating true talent
  • inclusive and diverse workplace
  • individuality
  • creativity
  • satisfaction
  • loyalty
  • unecessary stress
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • client-facing roles
  • professionalism
  • dress code
  • work-life balance
  • casual attire
  • pioneers
  • traditional notions
  • correlation
  • job performance
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