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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar chart illustrates the
export
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earnings
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 (in billions of
dollars
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) of one country across five categories in 2015 and 2016,
while
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 the accompanying table shows the percentage change in each category’s value over the same period.
Overall
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,
export
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earnings
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 rose in four of the five categories between 2015 and 2016, with only gems and jewellery seeing a decline. Petroleum products remained the country’s top
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 earner in both years,
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 textiles experienced the largest proportional growth. In detail, petroleum products generated the highest
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 revenue, growing slightly from around 61
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 to roughly 63
billion
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 in 2016, representing a 3% decrease. Engineered goods, the second most valuable
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, rose from approximately 57
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 to 62
billion
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dollars
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, an 8.5% rise.
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, gems and jewellery
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 the only category to see a fall, with
earnings
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 dropping from 44
billion
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 to 41
billion
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dollars
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, equivalent to a 5.18% decrease. Agricultural products saw only a marginal rise of 0.81%, from 31
billion
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 to just over 32
billion
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dollars
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. Meanwhile, textiles recorded the most substantial percentage growth of 15.24%, with
earnings
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 climbing from about 31
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 to 26
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016. Engineered goods were the least profitable category in both years, despite their 8.5% increase.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, dollars, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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