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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
he
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 bar chart illustrates the earnings of a certain
country’expert
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country’s expert
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 in different
type
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types
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 of goods in 2025 and 2016. The table
show
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shows
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 the percentage change of each category. There are five types of goods in the chart
and
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, and
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 four types
has
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have
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 a rise from 2015 to
2016
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2016,
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 except gems and jewellery. Earnings from Petroleum
products
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is
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are
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 the maximum. The biggest export
earning
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earnings
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 both in 2015 and 2016
is
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are
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 petroleum
products
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. It has
3
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a 3
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percent
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per cent
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 rise compared with 2015 and reaches about 63 billion in 2016. The second one is engineering goods. It has
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an 8.5
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percent
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per cent
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 rise compared with 2015 and reaches 62 billion in 2016, a little
fewer
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less
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 than petroleum
products
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. Obviously, textiles
has
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have
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 the biggest rising
pencentage
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percentage
about
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, about
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 15.24
On the other hand
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, gems and jewellery
is
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are
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 the only
one
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ones
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has decreasing
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that have decreased
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. It
drops
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dropped
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 5.18
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percent
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per cent
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 from 2015. As for
agriculture
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products
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, it
rises
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rose
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 0.81
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percent
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per cent
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 from 2015
which
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, which
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 seems a stable
types
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type
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 and almost has no changes.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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