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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The two chart illustrates the variations in terms of the figure
of
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 five different types of
the
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export earnings over the period from 2015 to 2016.
Overall
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,the petroleum
products
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 recorded the highest amount of export earnings
.
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while
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 the textiles had the lowest figure. The quantity of agricultural
products
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 declined during the given period,
whereas
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 the other
products
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 underwent an increase. The
petrolum
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petroleum
products
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 were by far the most important
goods
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 of
expert earrings
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export earnings
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,which
increase
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increased
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 significantly by 3% to 61.5
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billions
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billion
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.
By contrast
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,the engineered
goods
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 rose dramatically by 8.5% to 60
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billions
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billion
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 during the same period, which had
a
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the
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 potential to take over the petroleum
goods
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 as the primary. The gems and jewellery
goods
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 were the only
one which
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ones that
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 underwent a decrease by 5.18% to 41
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billions
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billion
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.The agricultural
products
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growed
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grew
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 slightly by 0.81% to 32
billions
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while
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 the textiles increased dramatically from 26
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billions
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billion
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 to
a
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the
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 same figure of 32
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billions
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billion
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words products, goods, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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