Five months ago,you started renting an apartment on a six-months agreement.You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment.In your letter say how long you now want to rent the apartment for explain why your plans have changed tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

Dear Mr.John, I am writing to kindly request to extend my stay,as my current agreement was only for
six-months
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.
Firstly
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,being a
student
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I have to
rented
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rent
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a
flate
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flat
because I moved
another
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city for my higher education.I rented a room
nearby
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my university,after my
exam
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I need to prepare my thesis,
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I want to stay here more
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then
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than
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one year.
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,my plan has changed to leave
this
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place because my hometown is
bit
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a bit
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far away from
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city,and I have to travel 6 hours to reach there.
from
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my thinking that
my
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apply
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most time is wasted in
traveling
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travelling
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because of
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reason I
postpond
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postponed
my decision to leave.
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,I
woud
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would
like to inform you
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problem which I faced in these months.Mostly,the lift is not
worked
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working
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due to
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some issue,the management
do
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not take notice to maintain
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.I live on the 6th floor
so
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this
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is
main
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the main
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problem of
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building. Thank you for your consideration. Yours sincerely, Rabia Rizwan.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper punctuation and spacing. It makes your writing look neat.
task achievement
Use a more polite tone in your request to extend the rental period.
task achievement
You explained clearly why your plans have changed. This is a good part of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your intention to write this letter is clear from the beginning.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • apartment
  • rent
  • owner
  • longer
  • agreement
  • plans
  • changed
  • problem
  • living
  • experience
  • request
  • extend
  • additional
  • six months
  • year
  • personal
  • circumstances
  • job
  • stability
  • family
  • needs
  • situation
  • school
  • commitments
  • maintenance
  • issue
  • leaking
  • faucet
  • heating
  • attention
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