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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

As most
people
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 spend a major part of their adult life at
work
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, job
satisfaction
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 is an important factor in personal happiness. Job
satisfaction
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 is influenced by many factors. At the beginning, it is whether there is a reasonable salary and benefits,
such
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 as timely payment of
wage
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wages
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, holidays. It can make
people
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 feel
recognized
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 for their
work
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.
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, there is a good working
environment
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, including a physical
environment
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that is
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 not noisy and safe, and a humanistic
environment
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that is
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 friendly to
everyone
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. In my mother’s companies, colleagues often help each other, and leaders
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 listen to employee suggestions.
Everyone
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 is willing to
work
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 hard.
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, there is
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room for career development. If
everyone
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 can learn new knowledge and have opportunities for promotion in their
work
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, they will
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motivation
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 and more satisfied.
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, there is a balance between
work
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 and life. You don’t have to
work
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 overtime, and can spend time with your family. It is very important for
people
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. It is actually difficult to achieve the
satisfaction
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 of all
works
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.
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, there are industry differences, and some
work
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 only
have
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 poor working conditions.
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, construction workers
are suffered
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wind
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from wind
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 and sun every day, and their
wage
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wages
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 may not
stable
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be stable
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, their needs
is
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are
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 hard to meet.
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, individual
expections
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expectations
 are
difference
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,
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 some
people
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 need stability
and
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, and
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 others like changes. It is difficult to meet
everyone
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 in a company.
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, there are
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 resource limitations
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small
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 company may not have enough money to provide high benefits and training opportunities, so they can only ensure basic operation,
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 low employee
satisfaction
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.
However
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,
although
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 it may
it
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satisfy
everyone
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 100%,
effort
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efforts
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such
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 as the government
require
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 companies to protect employee rights can bring more
people
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 closer to
satisfaction
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. In the summary, salary,
environment
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, development, and balance are key factors that affect job
satisfaction
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.
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 it is hard to satisfy all workers, through the
effort
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 of society, more
people
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 can find
satisfaction
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 in their
work
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.

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task
Structure your answer with a clear intro that states your view, then a paragraph for each factor, and a short conclusion. Make sure you answer both parts of the question: factors and realism.
coherence
Improve coherence by using clear topic sentences and linking words. Each paragraph should stay on one main idea: salary, environment, development, balance.
accuracy
Check grammar and word choice. Use simple sentences and avoid long chains. Pay attention to plural forms and common phrases.
structure
The essay has a clear plan with an intro, body and conclusion.
coherence
Uses linking words like Firstly, Secondly, Furthermore, Finally.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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