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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the norbiton
area
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 in the present
days
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day
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,
as well as
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,
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apply
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 the planned development.
Overall
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, the
norbiton
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Norbiton
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 industrial
area
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 is located
at
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on
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 the east side of the town, with a river
on
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to
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 the north, separating the farmland from the industrial
area
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, which is located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
map
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, represented by a few factory
biuldings
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buildings
 and roads, followed by the main road at the extreme south of the
map
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.
the
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The
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 planned development shows
a
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apply
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substantially
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substantial
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 growth and modifications of the
overallinfrastructure
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overall infrastructure
 of the
area
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 between the farmland and the main road.
Firstly
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, the planned development of the
norbiton
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Norbiton
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area
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 replaces what
once were
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were once
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 factories for
housings
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housing
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.
Moreover
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, the roads have been developed to
acomodate
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accommodate
 all the new
biuldings
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buildings
 that have been planned for the
area
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, which are
,
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apply
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 a school and a playground to the east side of the roundabout located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
map
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,
as well as
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 shops and a medical
center
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centre
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 around the
round about
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roundabout
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.  
Secondly
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, a bridge is planned for the north of the
map
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 to cross the river and provide
acess
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access
 to the housing that will be located in farmland.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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