The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the proportion of employees in the five industries related to tourism from 2009 to 2019.
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, the cultural services ,
such
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as museums and galleries, experienced a slight decline over the period of ten years,
whereas
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the remaining four sectors saw increases.
To begin
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with, in 2009, the cultural sector started with 82.8, which was the second lowest of all and was roughly a quarter of that of sports in 2019 at 345.7.
However
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, in 2019,
this
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industry saw a somewhat decrease in its number, resulting in the lowest at 77.4. Turning to the other four aspects, hotel companies stood at 299.2 as the most popular industry in 2009.
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, within a decade, even though they experienced a slight increase, they became the
third,
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which was almost five times that of the travel sector in 2009. In regard to the sport and food industries, they started with 283.4 and
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284.7, respectively. After ten years, there was a change in the ranking, where we can see that the food sector became the top,
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the sport faculty remained the same.
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, in terms of travel agencies, there was about a double increase in the figure from 60.9 to 114.2.

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