The image shows the percentage of Australian boys and girls attending four different sports activities after school in 2010, where swimming: boys 13%, girls ~23%, football: boys 22%, girls ~6%, netball: boys 1%, girls ~16%, basketball: boys 8%, girls 7%, no sports: boys ~12%, girls 10%. Given the complexity of the image, the above description may not be entirely accurate.

This
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and
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from Australia
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in 2010.
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,
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are high in football, basketball, and the percentage for no
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is less than the
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. The
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are higher in swimming, netball
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the percentage for no
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is higher than the
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. The peak
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for
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is
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is 20
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of them
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a strong person,
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the highest
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for
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is
netball
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is just above 15
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of them
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it requires a person with high stamina. In basketball, around 7
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of
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exercise
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after school, and for
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is just above 5
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, which means
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are slightly higher than the
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by approximately 2
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. In no
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,
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girls are
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higher than
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it is because usually
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are more energetic.

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accuracy
Check the chart data and stick to what is on the chart. Do not add extra numbers or guess.
structure
Make a short intro that restates the task. Then give an overview of the main points.
organization
Give a clear paragraph for each group or each idea. Use simple link words to connect ideas.
content
Be sure to describe all parts of the chart and use exact numbers when you can.
logic
Cut any reason that is not in the data. Keep to what you can prove.
language
Use plain words to talk about the data, not long or hard words.
structure
Overview at the start shows some main idea.
content
Some clear compare points between boys and girls.
style
You use contrast words such as 'but' and 'and' in places.

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