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Band 4.5

You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: -Give details of your stay -What were the high & low points of the hotel -What are your suggestions; recommendations and / or complaints about the hotel You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with your service, which was below average during my stay. My family and I have stayed at
the
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apply
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room 234
hotel
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, hotel
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 Park Inn
,
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Hotel, pickering
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pickering
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Pickering
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, Ontario. We have booked our stay prior to a month for the
fornight
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fortnight
.
While
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booking
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booking,
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 I
have
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requested
for
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the
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a
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 room
at
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on
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 the top floor with two beds,
I
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but I
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stayed
at
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on
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ground
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the ground
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 floor with one bed. Over
this
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 period, to change my room, I have emailed and
calls
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the front desk repeatedly to describe
them
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to them
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 my situation, on four occasions, I did not
received
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receive
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 any response. Not only was it discomfort for my family
but
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, but
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it also
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also was
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was also
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an embarassing
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embarassing momemt
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embarrassing moment
 for us.
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,
although
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 breakfast was quite delicious, during our stay, the hotel staff did not come to housekeeping even after requesting several times.
This
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 stay has spoiled my whole
excitment
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excitement
 for the trip. I would appreciate it
If
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if
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 you could urgently review your services, ensure that no other guests will get
such
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 experiences, and take appropriate actions against housekeepers and the front desk staff. I
belive
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believe
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 these measures would greatly improve the service for
rest
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the rest
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 of the visitors. Yours sincerely, Amarpreet Singh.

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You tell what you did and what you want in a clear way.
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You note that breakfast was good, a positive point.
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