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The world of work is changing rapidly and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes for this rapid change, and suggest ways of preparing people for the world of work in the future. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the global world of career jobs,a lot has
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systematically
 changed and certain careers are
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 to exist.There
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 a number of reasons
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why
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 changes are taking place in the world.
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work
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 towards the new ways of
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 of the
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. The first significant change has been the development of new technology
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 as
softwares
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software
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 repetitive tasks done manually.
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 has changed the speed at which activities are completed and
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 the customer experience
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received
 by clients.To add on ,the development of Artificial Intelligence (AI) has been a game changer in that process delivery and financial outcomes
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 increased greatly.
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,what required 10 individuals to do in data entry only requires one intelligent automation to
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 removed the other individuals interpreting the data and creating visual images
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 AI will instantly create the reports and visual images. Another item has been the changes in business models of companies.In old times,
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 targeting one individual in a household was enough,but
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 there has been an increase in
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people
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of people
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 targeted by organisations.It has been observed that children are the best clients to target for products and increase the return
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 investments.With
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 in mind,structural changes have been developed to streamline ways of
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 in organisations
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 what was the focus and achieving departments are
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no longer
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 ,in the banking
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 banks used to provide cheques for their clients as a service.In recent
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 banking regulators have given deadlines to banks to stop printing and
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cheques. For people to be
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future proof
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,they need to be deliberate
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about
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 the skills they choose to learn .What is common at the moment is the learning to use AI and even developing AI .Other aspects would be learning to manage software that manages
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manual
 activities. In conclusion,
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 learning new
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 skills will enable people to have new kinds of jobs for the
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structure
Plan what you want to say first. State a clear idea in the start and end. Then make two or three main points.
language
Use simple and clear sentences. Check spellings and use correct word form like 'software' and 'mimic'.
content
Give a real example for each point, or explain more what you mean.
coherence
Link ideas with small joining words so the reader can follow your line of thought.
content
The essay tries to cover both causes and how to get ready for future work.
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There are ideas on AI and new tech that show a real view of work change.
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Even with errors, the text shows effort to give examples from life, like banking changes.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Robotics
  • Globalization
  • Outsourcing
  • Freelance work
  • Flexibility
  • Job Security
  • Education reform
  • Critical thinking
  • Adaptability
  • Continuous education
  • Retraining programs
  • Legislation
  • Corporate responsibility
  • Competitive edge
  • Work-life balance
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