Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Outdoor activities nearby Write a letter to the local council. In your letter, give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to request
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that you
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reconsider your decision to close
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Earnclife recreation
centre
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that we have in our community. As you know, we have more than 8 thousand members in our society , and it is the only
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sports and leisure
centre
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where we can go in our free time. The decision to shout down the
centre
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was shocking news not only for me but
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for the dwellers. I,
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my nearest and dearest , usually visit it in the evening for the purpose of doing daily exercises.
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, I have noticed the majority of teenagers enjoy swimming
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and other activities there, and locals usually spend a significant amount of time there. Children
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play indoor games under the supervision of their parents. If
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place is shut down, many people will feel dejected
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I personally believe that teenagers who use
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centre
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would get involved in forbidden activities in their spare time. If cutting the cost is the main reason, I am sure there would be alternatives. I have already talked to several members , and all of them are against closing the place. I hope you will rethink your decision for the betterment of our community. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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structure
Split long ideas into one idea per paragraph to help flow.
grammar
Fix small grammar mistakes and wrong words (for example shout down -> shut down).
content
Give a clear plan or idea to save money with less harm to the centre so a solution is shown.
purpose
The letter has a clear aim to keep the centre open.
tone
The tone is formal and polite.
content
It shows how families use the centre and its value.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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