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about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the amount of energy lost in 100 units when it is generated from black coal and when it is generated from brown coal. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the amount of energy lost in 100 units when it is generated from black coal and when it is generated from brown coal. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two
flowchart
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flowcharts
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 illustrate the process of
the
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apply
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energy
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during
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generation during
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 the process of electricity generation from brown coal and black coal. In
a
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general, both
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loss
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the loss
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energy
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of energy
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 of brown coal and black
coa
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coal
 include three steps, and their
amounnt
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amount
 of waste
do
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does
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 not
has
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have
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the
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a
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 significant difference
in
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apply
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per 100 units. The first step of the electric generation is
transport
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transporting
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 fuel
energt
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energy
 to the power station, once the fuel
energy
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arrinve
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arrives
, the cost of
energy
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start
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starts
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.
Additional
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, in the power station, most
energy
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are
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is
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loss
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lost
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, both
two
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apply
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types of
caol's
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caol
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 (brown and black)
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lose
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loss
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 over 60
percent
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per cent
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 in total, there are 70 units and 68
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unit
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units
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 respectively.
when
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When
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 the power station
complete
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completes
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it
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its
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 task, the remind aout of
the
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energy
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 will be transported and contributed to
consumer
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consumers
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. During
this
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 process, the minor
energy
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 will be consumed.
and
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And
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 the two types
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of coa
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coa
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coal
 have
same
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the same
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loss
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, 3
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unit
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units
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.
Finally
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, the brown coal
leave
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leaves
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 27
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unit
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units
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energy
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of energy
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 for
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the comsumer
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comsumer
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consumer
, and black coal
leave
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leaves
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a slight
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slight
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slightly
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 higher
unit
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 for
consumer
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the consumer
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, loss, unit with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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