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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

In many countires, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified. Do you agree or disagree?

Smoking in public places is illegal in many
countires
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countries
 and many people
thinks
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think
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 that
such
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 a
abn
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ban
 is justified for
alot
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a lot
 of
resons
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reasons
.I totally agree with
this
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 rule because it
prevent
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prevents
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 us from harming the
enviroment
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environment
 and
avert
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protects
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 us from
health
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issuses
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issues
 because of passive smoking .
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Further more
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Furthermore
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,making smoking illegal can lead to
amore
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a
safe
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safer
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 and
healthy
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healthier
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enviroment
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environment
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. For
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for instance
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, make woods fire rate decrease
in
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apply
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the
cause
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rate
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 of many individuals forget to extinguish their
cigarette
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cigarettes
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and
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, and
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 it can
make
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improve
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 our global warming ways better because were reducing the
smork
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smoking
 rate .
Also
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, smoking can make
other
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others
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 have
health
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 problems like lung cancer and more because of passive smoking .There is a recent study that shows that more than 40% of people who have friends
that
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who
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 smoke
affects
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are affected
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 by it
and
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, and
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 over the long term can lead to a variety of
health
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 issues . And
i
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I
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 think that will lead to
alot
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a lot
 of people to stop smoking in
term
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terms
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 of they can only smoke in
there
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their
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 home .
Overall
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 ,
i
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I
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 think
this
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 rule will have a positive impact
in
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on
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 our society in the future
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,
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and
i
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I
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 think
it
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apply
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more
country
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countries
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 should do it for our
enviroment
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environment
 and our
health
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 .

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task management
Plan your essay with a simple outline: an intro that states your view, 2 or 3 clear points with short examples, and a brief conclusion.
grammar
Use simple grammar and spell key words correctly (environment, reasons, health). Try to keep short, clear sentences.
coherence
Make ideas easy to follow: use linking words like also, because, but to connect ideas.
content
Give one clear example for each point and avoid unclear stats. If you are unsure about a fact, skip it.
vocabulary
Use common words you know well. Do not try to use hard words that you may spell wrong.
task response
You state a clear position in favor of the ban.
content
You mention health and safety as reasons.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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