In many nations, people in huge cities either live alone or in small family units, in stead of in large, extended family group. Is is a positive or negative trend.

In many big cities
people
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, people
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live in
a
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small families or like to live by themselves,
rathar
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rather
than
large
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a large
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family. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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living alone is better
,
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;
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however
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however,
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it has
own
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its own
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negative sides. On one hand, living alone means more privacy, space and
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a quite
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quite
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quiet
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home. When you live
alone
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alone,
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you can focus on your
work
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or study without anyone disturbing you. From my own
experience
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experience,
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I can see that people with a big family struggle to
work
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from home. Noisy
childeren
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children
, grandma who likes to watch TV with loud sound can ruin focus, and become an
obsticle
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obstacle
for the working
enviroment
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environment
.
Also
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, most
of
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apply
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people nowadays can not afford
huge
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a huge
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house
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, whcih
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whcih
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which
means for a big family more tightness at home. It means you can be late for your
work
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or study because the line for the shower
were
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was
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too long. On the
hand
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other hand
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,
big
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a big
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family means you will not feel
yourself
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apply
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lonely. The feeling of loneliness sometimes could lead to depression.
That is
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why
its
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it's
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good to have a big family because there is always
someone
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you can talk with and
someone
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who
cheer
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can cheer
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you up.
Although
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,
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apply
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in a big family you can always ask for
a
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apply
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help and care,
for example
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when you
got
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get
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sick. It is very good to have
someone
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who will take care, go
for
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to
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a
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the
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grocery
to
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store to
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preapre
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prepare
a hot soup or go to a pharmacy store for drugs. In conclusion, both living alone and living with a big family have advantages and disadvantages. Living alone gives more privacy, space, and peace, making it easier to focus on
work
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or study.
On the other hand
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, a big family offers constant companionship, emotional support, and help when needed. The better option depends on personal priorities—whether
someone
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values independence and quiet or enjoys closeness and shared moments with others.

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task response
Be sure to answer the task with a clear view from the start. State your view in the first paragraph.
grammar
Keep to easy, clear grammar. Check spelling and word form.
cohesion
Use the right link words: On the one hand... On the other hand... Also, finally.
examples
Give simple examples that support your point.
structure
Make the idea order easy: idea, explain, example, result.
content
You show both sides and give a view.
structure
The end says both side have pros and cons.
coherence
Some good idea order in parts.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • live
  • alone
  • small
  • family
  • big
  • city
  • trend
  • positive
  • negative
  • freedom
  • privacy
  • work
  • study
  • save
  • move
  • job
  • lonely
  • loneliness
  • care
  • support
  • old
  • age
  • bonds
  • ties
  • society
  • meal
  • duty
  • cost
  • housing
  • city life
  • club
  • group
  • community
  • policy
  • change
  • future
  • overall
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • impact
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