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five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement . you know wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six montha you originally agreed with the owner. write a letter to the owner of your apartment. in your letter say how long you now want to rent the apartment for; explain why your plans have changed; tell the owner about the problem in the apartment.

Dear Mr Luis,
Thans
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Thanks
 for providing me a nice
accomadation
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accommodation
 in Vancouver, I have been happy living in your property. There are some new circumstances
in relate
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 to my employment
so
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, so
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that
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I am writing to ask if I can continue living in the flat for more
6
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than 6
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months. As I said
last
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 time, I came to
Vocouver
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Vancouver
 to have a
6 months of
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 artificial
intellience
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intelligence
 training program, but as of the sixth month, one A.I. exploiting company in
Vocouver
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Vancouver
 has offered me a job as a
Chabot
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engeenier
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engineer
.
Hence
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,
i
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I
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 would like to prolong our renting agreement for
another
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 half
one
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a
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 year if you approve. Speaking of the apartment, there are some
unpredicted
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unexpected
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 issues that may bother you a little. Actually, I have repaired the wardrobe door and cleaned the
strains
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stains
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 on the carpet since
moved
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 in. Yet, there seems
a
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water leaking under the tub in the bathroom, because my
nebeighter
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neighbour
 who lives by me has called the building manager and complained that my sewage system
had
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rusluted
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rustled
in
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on
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 his floor
wet
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apply
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. I consider that I should let you know the situation in case the manager may consult you
how
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on how
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 to
trickle
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tackle
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 the leaking. Anyway, don't worry, I will do my best being a qualified
tennet
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tenant
. I look forward to your response
,
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sinecerely
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Sincerely
,

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar errors so the message is clear.
content
Be clear about how long you want to stay and why you change your plan; keep the reason simple.
structure
Try to use one idea per paragraph and use polite tone in every part of the note.
tone
Polite opening and closing.
content
You say you want to stay longer.
content
You tell about a problem with the flat.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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