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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant
The charts
illustreat
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illustrate
 the percentage of
water
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 consumption for various
utilizes
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utilities
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 in six different regions of the world in three standards,
Indusrial
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Industrial
, Agricultural,
Domestic
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and Domestic
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that four
contienents
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continents
like
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, like
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,
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apply
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Central
Asia
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,
south East
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Southeast
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Asia
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, Africa and South
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America
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America,
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is
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are
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 the most
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use
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used
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 for the
water
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 in agricultural fields,
while
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Europe
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 and North
America
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use
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 the
water
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 for industrial
purpose
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purposes
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.
However
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, it can be clear that the
Domistic
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domestic
 utilize is the least
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use
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throghout
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throughout
 areas. There are
a
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apply
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noticable
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noticeable
 uses of
water
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 in four different areas for agricultural
field
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fields
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, especially in
Cenral
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Central
Asia
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 for 88%, followed by Africa with 84%, South East
Asia
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 81% and
then
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 comes South
America
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 by 71%, respectively. And a low uses for sure in Domestic and Industrial for all four contienents, approximitely, thier uses for the
water
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 specifically in
this
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 two fields are similar, for instrance, in Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 when it comes in the Domestic
use
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 there are equivalent by 7% for both of them,
nevertheless
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 they differ in Inustrial utilization, in Central
Asia
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, they have a proprtion by only 5%,
while
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 South East
Asia
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 can be estimated by 12%. In
Europe
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 and North
America
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, people there
are
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mostly depend on Industrial usage, so it's clear that
Europe
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 has the most
use
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 of
water
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above all
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 regions
specifically
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, specifically
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 in
Industrial
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the Industrial
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 field by 53%, and
then
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 comes North
America
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 by 48%.
However
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, less
use
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for
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of
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the
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apply
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water
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 in
Agricultural
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agriculture
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 by 39%
for
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in
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the
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apply
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North
America
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 and 32%
for
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in
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Europe
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which
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, which
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 we can divided by half of the
use
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 of
water
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 than other areas in the world.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, america, use, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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