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Band 2.5

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
A lot of
people
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 think about the
traffic
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congestion
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 and what
cuases
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causes
 it, and they believe
if
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that if
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 the gas price
increases
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increases,
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that
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it
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 should solve the case
,
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.
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 I think it could be a
resonable
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reasonable
if
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solution if
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 it is done correctly
and
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, and
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 it would be a part of the solution.
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il
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I believe if the prices of the gas have increased
that
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, that
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 would be a great decision if there
is
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apply
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a great alternative ways to
trasport
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transport
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for
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, for
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 instance : an
intergrated
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integrated
 affordable public
trasportation infostrucutre
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transportation infrastructure
,
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.
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This
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 will
incourage
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encourage
people
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 to use it
and
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, and
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 it
well
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will
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 help the
traffic
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congestion
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 dilemma.
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However
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, there is a
real life
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real-life
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examble
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example
 in Riyadh, Saudi Arabia
,
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.
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 The city was
car dependent
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car-dependent
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and
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, and
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 the prices have gone up,
But
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but
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 the
traffic
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 has not decreased! Because there
was
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were
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 no alternatives,
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nevertheless
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Nevertheless
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Nevertheless,
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 the city
have
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has
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 launched a new public transportation system,
And
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and
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 the
people
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 thought that was the solution to the
traffic
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congestion
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,
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.
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 It indeed helped some
people
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 not to
relay
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rely
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 on car transportation,
But
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but
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 it did not help the
traffic
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congestion
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.
Conclusion
In
conclution
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conclusion
,
If
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if
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 there
is
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are
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 other options to
transport
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transport,
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 it may
theorticly
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theoretically
 help
decreasing
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decrease
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 the
traffic
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 problem,
But
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but
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 it may not affect it at all
and
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or
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 if not
negatively
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, negatively
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.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep a clear line of argument through the essay.
coherence
Make each paragraph talk about one idea. Use a topic sentence to start each paragraph.
content
Use more real or precise examples and explain how they back your point.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use full stops and capital letters more correctly.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show flow from one idea to the next.
content
The essay does show a main idea about price and traffic.
example
An example from Riyadh is used to show a point.
concept
The idea that better transport options can help is clear.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discourage
  • incentivize
  • environmentally friendly
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • pollutants
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable economy
  • disproportionately affect
  • daily commuting
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • comprehensive solutions
  • public transportation systems
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