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Band 4

A lot of charities and organisations have to publicize their activities by setting up a number of days to name the special day like National Children’s day and National non-smoking day. Why do they do so? What are the effects?

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this
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 modern era, several clubs and
companyies
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companies
 are
share
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sharing
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 their
acticities
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activities
 by setting up a
day
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 with special meaning
so
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i
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 think
this
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 is a positive development in
the
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society and there are
number
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a number
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 of effects on folks that
are going to elaborate
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in
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 the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, most of the units
setup
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set up
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 a special name for the
day
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 to aware
people
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 about the situation
which was
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that
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happend
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happened
in
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apply
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the
past
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previous
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day
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 or
thing
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things
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is
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 going on in
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society.Apartfrom that, childern
day
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 is a special
day
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 because in the past days childern used to do work as a labour so they were not good not only for their health but
also
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 for their education,
furthermore
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 these companies took a step so socity members come to know that these kids are not a labour and they can
also
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 enjoy their childhood as other child. There are so many effects of
this
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 trend that
people
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 can come together under
a
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one roof, because when ever these clubs share their activities
then
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people
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 could come together to help each other that will be very helpful for the socity,because as we know these days everyperson has fast paced life so they
are only focus
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are only focused
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 on their work ,but when they know that there is a special
day
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 for certian thing
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 they willing to do their contribute.
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, after a
grat
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great
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 deal of
thoughts
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thought
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, these special days have
more
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a more
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 positive impact on
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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so
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 they could raise
fund
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funds
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 to help other needy
people
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organization
Make one clear main idea for each paragraph. Start with a short intro that says your view, then two to three body paragraphs with one idea each, and finish with a short conclusion.
grammar
Use simple, correct sentences. Check verb forms and spelling in each sentence.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and how ideas connect, like first, also, but, because, so.
content
Give one or two small examples to show how days can help people, such as a day to learn about safety or to raise money for good causes.
lexical
Keep words simple and avoid hard spellings. Check your spelling and use the basic words in the top 100 list.
topic
Your topic is easy for readers and relates to life in society.
position
You show a positive view and try to explain why these days exist.
structure
You make a clear plan to write about why the days exist and their effects.
style
You use many sentences to share ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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