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Traveling with a group and a tour guide is the best way to travel do you agress or disagree

It is widely believed that travelling with a group and a
tour
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 guide is the best way to travel.
However
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, I firmly disagree with
this
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 viewpoint for several reasons like, the
tour
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 guide schedule might be opposed to mine.
Moreover
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, travelling with a group is challenging
due to
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 different preferences.
First,
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tour
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 guides are not always friendly or helpful in most cases
and
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, and
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 their schedules are not flexible either.
For example
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, I went to Turkey and the
tour
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 guide was extremely aggressive and offensive with us
and
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, and
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 he tried to frame us and asked for extra money.
In addition
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, no one could sue him.
Second,
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traveling
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travelling
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 with
group
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a group
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 is not my
favorite
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favourite
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 option
that
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apply
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because every single one has
its
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their
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 own rules and preferences
and
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, and
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 they
aren't
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don't
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collaborating
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collaborate
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 with each other.
For example
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, if
want
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you want
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 to go to
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a restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurant,
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 every person in a various mood
one
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, one
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 wants Italian
food
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food,
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other
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another
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 requires Indian cuisine
and
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, and
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 you don't like any. In conclusion, in my opinion,
traveling
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travelling
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 alone is more
way
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apply
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compelling than
traveling
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travelling
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 with
others
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others,
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 where
,
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apply
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 you can explore the city
by
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on
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 your own
choice
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and you can eat whatever you want.

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task
Make a clear plan in the intro and state your view in one short sentence.
task
Give more general reasons for your view, not just one bad guide story. Explain how group travel can limit time, money, and choice.
coherence
Use more link words to show how ideas go together and make each paragraph have a clear main idea.
language
Fix grammar and spell a few words to be easy to read.
position
The essay shows a clear view against the idea.
evidence
It gives a real life example to support the view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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