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Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. af

Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion. af
The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of five transportation means used by people to attend
one
Correct determiner usage
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 particular university in 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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, private vehicles lost significant popularity over 5 years,
while
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 usage of public transport and bicycles became increasingly dominant. Other means of transportation,
such
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 as walking on foot and moving by train ,
also
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 demonstrated a positive trend, but not a dramatic
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Correct pronoun usage
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 In 2004, cars were by far the most commonly used travelling option, accounting for just over half of the total proportion (51%). The bus was followed at 33%,
while
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 the bicycle was recorded at around one-tenth.
Moreover
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, walking and train were relatively less popular at 4 and 3 per cent, respectively. By 2009, the pattern had shifted significantly. The bus emerged as the leading transportation method, rising to 46%. Bicycles approximately doubled their shares (16%),
whereas
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 walking and usage of trains rose slightly to 6% and 3%.
In contrast
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, the figure of cars dropped significantly by almost half (26%);
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, it still remained the second popular choice among people.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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