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The graph below shows unemployed rate in labour farse 9 countries (Ireland, Poland, Italy, Canda, The UK, Germany, The USA, Australia and Japan) in 1994 and 2004

The graph below shows unemployed rate in labour farse 9 countries (Ireland, Poland, Italy, Canda, The UK, Germany, The USA, Australia and Japan) in 1994 and 2004
The chart compares five European and four developed countries (
Ireland
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, Poland, Italy, Canada, the UK, Germany, the USA, Australia and Japan) in terms of many percentage of unemployed had in those countries between 1994 and 2004.
Overall
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, nine regions had different rates of joblessness.
While
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Ireland
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 had the highest number of unemployed, Japan's figure
experienced
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was
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 the
least
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lowest
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.
By contrast
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, in 2004, the lowest unemployment rate was in
Ireland
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. As the table shows, the percentage of jobless people a sharply decreased from 14.8% to 4.4% over 10 years from 1994 in
Ireland
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.
Otherwise
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, four countries (Italy, Canada, the UK and the USA) show a slight decline from 1994 to 2004. But
this
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 figure grew rapidly from 12.4% to 19% the same years in Poland. And Germany, Australia and Japan experienced a slow increase amount of unemployment for 10 years until 2004.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ireland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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