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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts depict the proportion of different types of
energy
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 that
was
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were
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 produced in France between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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,
It
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it
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 can be clearly seen that gas and coal had a slight difference for both years ,
which
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with
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 the petrol
production
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 rate gradually
decreased
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decreasing by
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 around 10% in 2005.
While
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 the nuclear and other
energy
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production
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 had a growth
volume
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in volume
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.
To begin
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 with,
The
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the
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 proportion of gas and coal volume led
way
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the way
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 at 29.63% and 29.80% in 1995 and 30.31% and 30.93% in the
last
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 year of
production
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 totals.
However
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,
petrol
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the petrol
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production
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 rate had a significant change with 29.27% in 1995 and 19.55% in 2005 ,which decreased
just
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by just
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 below 10%. Moving to the other groups, the other
energy
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 and nuclear had a remarkable growth
rates
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rate
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 because the percentage of petrol
production
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 declined.
the
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The
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 other
energy
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 and nuclear started at 4.90% and 6.40% in 1995 and 9.10% and 10.10% in 2005, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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