The table shows unemployment rate in labour force in 1994 and 2004.

The table shows unemployment rate in labour force in 1994 and 2004.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table shows unemployment rate in labour force in 1994 and 2004.
The table demonstrates the rate of jobless people in the labour force in nine different
countries
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between 1994 and 2004.
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,
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such
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as Poland, Germany, Australia and Japan experienced a significant increase in unemployment,
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other
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(Ireland, Italy, Canada, the UK, and the USA) witnessed a marginal reduction throughout the period. In 1994, the percentage of people who did not work was 14.8 % and it declined remarkably to 4.4% in a decade. The number of people without a workplace in Italy was 11.8% in 1994 , and it
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went down to 8.4% in the next 10 years. Other
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have experienced a notable decline
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Canada (10.6% to 7.7%), the United Kingdom (9.5% to 4.7%), and the United States ( 7.2% to 5.4%). Poland,
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, was 12.4% and
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figure climbed noticeably and reaching its highest at 19% in 2004. Turning to the next source, Germany was 7.2% in 1994 , and it showed a higher trend at 9.4% in 2004. Australia and Japan illustrated an important rise within the given years. In 1994, Australia was only 5% before rising to 5.4% in 2004.
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Japan was 2.7% and increased to 2 per cent , making it 4.7% in 2004.

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