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the line graph shows various types of technology used in US from 1995-1999. write main features and give comparison where necessary

the line graph shows various types of technology used in US from 1995-1999. write main features and give comparison where necessary
The provided line graph illustrates the usage of various types of
technoloigy
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technology
which
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, which
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 are washing
machine
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machines
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,
computer
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computers
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,
internet
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the internet
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 and DVD
player
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players
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in
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, in
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US
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the US
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 over a
peiod
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period
time
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of time
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beteween
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between
 1995 and 1999.
Overall
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, there was a significant increase in
using
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the use
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 of
phone
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phones
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,
while
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 there was a gradual increase in
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the use
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 of washing
machine
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machines
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,
internet
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the internet
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 and
computer
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computers
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.
However
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, the use of
DVD
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the DVD
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 player
is
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has
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 fluctuated.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • grow fast
  • steady
  • rapid
  • sharp
  • gradual
  • high
  • low
  • gap
  • compare
  • between
  • from
  • to
  • year
  • year by year
  • line
  • graph
  • data
  • technology
  • computer
  • phone
  • internet
  • video game
  • television
  • use
  • usage
  • highest
  • lowest
  • period
  • 1995
  • 1999
  • trend
  • overall
  • pattern
  • different
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