You recently moved to a new city for work. You want to join a local club or group to make new friends and spend your free time. Write a letter to the club organizer. In your letter: Introduce yourself and explain why you moved to this city Say what kind of club or activities you are interested in Ask for information about how you can join and what the requirements are

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I, Simranpreet Kaur, came to Canada
last
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month. I got a job offer from a company named Pharmhill, located in Brantford, Ontario, about six months ago.
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, I applied for the visa, and after visa
confirmation
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I came to Canada to
fulfill
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fulfil
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my dreams. Since I do not have any friends and family in Canada, I am looking for an opportunity to meet new people and enhance
social
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my social
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skills.
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, I played basketball back in India
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and took part in debate competitions to enlarge my knowledge.
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, I am
intersed
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interested
in joining a
club
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which has
sports
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a sports
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team and offers
heathy
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healthy
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educational competitions. Would you kindly let me know the requirements to become a
club
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member? Apart
form
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from
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the membership fee and identity proof, do you need any other documents? If your
club
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has a basketball team,
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I would like to give
trial
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a trial
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to become a team member. In case
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if
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the
club
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holds debate tournaments, do let me know. Thank you for your time and consideration. I will wait for your response. Yours sincerely, Simranpreet Kaur

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content
The letter covers the task: it states who you are, why you moved, what you want in a club, and asks how to join.
structure
Try to keep one idea per paragraph and make each paragraph carry a clear point.
language
Fix small spelling and grammar mistakes like intersed -> interested, Apart form -> Apart from, heathy -> healthy.
content
Explain more about your move and your plans in a simple way, and be sure what you want from the club.
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Ask in a direct way for steps to join and any time or meeting you can attend.
structure
Polite tone with 'Dear' and 'Yours sincerely'
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Clear wish to join and use of a trial for basketball
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Reason to move and lack of friends in new city
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Opening and closing are correct
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Shows willingness to participate in debate tournaments
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