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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree¿

It is often argued that
huge
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a huge
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 salary is much more important than
job
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satisfaction
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.The writer disagrees with the statement
and
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, and
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reasons
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the reasons
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 for
this
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 will be elaborated in subsequent paragraphs. First of all,it is an undeniable fact that
job
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satisfaction
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 is more necessary than receiving
high
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a high
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 salary.
Job
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satisfaction
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 helps increase productivity.
This
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 is because,when employees play their role
effectively
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effectively,
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 it helps
rise
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raise
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work
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 output.
As a result
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,
helping
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it helps
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 the financial economy of the society.
For instance
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,
youngsters
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youngsters,
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 especially
aged
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those aged
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 between the ages of 19 and 25
who
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, who
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work
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 in
agriculture
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agricultural
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 industries.They
work
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 very well
which
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, which
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 improves high crop production.
This
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 clearly shows why it is important to consider
work
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 satisfactory.
Additionally
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,
It
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it
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 helps
with
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to
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 save lives as human life is more important.
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Job
Correct article usage
A job
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 satisfactory helps workers perform their tasks
accordingly
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 to help save
life
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lives
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.
Example
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An example
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 is in the healthcare sector.Healthcare professionals
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such
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, such
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nurses
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as nurses
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,midwives and
doctors
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doctors,
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 are able to save many lives when
roles
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their roles
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 are played very well.
This
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 helps save patients from
high
Correct article usage
a high
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mortablity
Correct your spelling
mortality
 rate. In conclusion,increased productivity and saving
life
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lives
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is
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are
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 very important as they
rescult
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result
 from
job
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satisfaction
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.I firmly disagree with the statement that
huge
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a huge
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 salary is more important than
job
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satisfactory
Replace the word
satisfaction
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task response
Be clear about your view in the first line and keep it in the rest of the essay.
task response
Give more full reasons and real examples. End with a short, strong conclusion that fits your view.
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A clear view against the idea.
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Good link to health work and farming as acts of value.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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