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Gender quality is always a controversial discussion point, especially in the job market with some occupations preferable to males rather than females.

In the modern era, it is a matter of grave concern that all
kind
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kinds
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 of jobs can be performed by
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women
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women,
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while
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 others say that ladies are not capable of doing some and
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the same
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senarii
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 can be
seemable
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seen
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apply
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men
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matter
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. I totally agree with
this
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 statement and my perspectives in the upcoming paragraphs. First of
alll
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all
, gender equality doesn't mean that they have to do
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kinds of same
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same kinds of
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works
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. It is
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 matter of right. From
work
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 's perspectives , both
gender
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genders
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 have some capabilities and abilities to do the
work
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 .
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women
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 can not do construction
work
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 because it
need
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 a lot of strength
which
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, which
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 females do not have .
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Similarly
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men
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 can handle the kindergarten kids because of
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 kind of care and the way to handle babies.
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 ,
according to
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gender
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gender,
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 there are some
differences
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biological differences
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biologically
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apply
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.
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 argument is
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 in
the support of
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 statement . Especially, in the mines
work
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 only
men
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 are hired
due to
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 their physical strength. Even
they
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though they
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 prefer
men
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as compare
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compared
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 to
women
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due to
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 biological
reasons
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reasons,
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 as
women
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 have to give
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birth to babies . There are some
atmosphere
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atmospheres
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 which is not good for their health and for their babies. There are some precautions they have to take.So, there are
couple
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 of reasons which trigger
this
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 thing. In conclusion,
men
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 are physically
strong
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stronger
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 and capacity to
work
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 longer than
women
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. Even these decisions ultimately
in
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apply
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the
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favour
of
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women
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 . So there is
set
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 of norms which they have to follow
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then
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, then
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 there will be a
win win
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win-win
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 situation.

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structure
Make the plan clear. Start with a short intro that says your view. Then use 2 or 3 ideas in order. End with a short conclusion.
task response
Tell your main idea in one line at the start. Then give facts or proof for each idea.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words. Use when, and, but, also to help the flow.
content
Give more real and clear examples for each point. Do not only say 'women can' or 'men can'.
language
Watch spelling and grammar. Use simple form and check for mistakes.
content
You state your view clearly in the intro.
content
There are real examples used to show the point.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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