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The illustration below shows the proportion of people living in different types of houses in the areas in 2012 in Denmark.

The given table compares the percentage of residents living in four types of housing across three different areas of Denmark in 2012.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 most people in the Green Park
area
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 live in flats,
while
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 the lowest figures were for semi-detached and detached houses in the other two areas in Denmark. In the Central
area
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 people who live in apartments was lower 15% but it increased slightly to 18%
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then
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,
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 trend rose gradually to 28% in the Semi-Detached, and the percentage in the Detached was the highest and at 39%.
However
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, in the Green Park
area
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, people living in the flats were 76%
thenthis
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this
 figure dropped steadily to 14% in Terraced
then
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this
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 decrease rapidly to 5$ , the same percentage as Detached. Regarding the Southberg
area
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, the population living in the apartments were 25%
however
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then
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this
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 grew sharply to 56% In the Semi-Detached lives, a small part of the nation lived at 5% and
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 rose to 14% by 2012.

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task
Start with a short intro. Say what the table shows in one or two lines. Then finish with a short note on what the data shows overall.
coherence
Describe data in a clear order. Then stick to area or to type. Do not mix ideas in one sentence.
coherence
Use linking words like first, next, and, but, or, however to join ideas.
task
Check the numbers from the table. Do not say wrong facts or mix up places.
task
End with a short conclusion about the overall trend.
content
The essay shows an attempt to compare areas and use numbers.
structure
There is a clear topic about housing types in 2012 in Denmark.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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