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The illustration below shows the proportions of people living in different types of houses in three different areas in 2012 in Denmark.

The table compares the percentage of residents living in four types of housing across three areas of Denmark in 2012.
Overall
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, Green Park was dominated by flats,
while
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 detached
houses
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 were the most common in the Central area, and semi-detached housing was the main choice in Southberg. In the Central area, only 15% of people lived in apartments.
This
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 figure rose slightly to 18% for terraced
houses
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 and
then
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 increased
further
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 to 28% for semi-detached homes,
while
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 detached
houses
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 had the highest share at 39%.
In contrast
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, Green Park showed a very different trend.
However
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, Flats accounted for as much as 76% of residents, after which the figure dropped sharply to 14% for terraced homes. Semi-detached and detached housing were
least
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 popular, both at just 5%. Southberg displayed a mixed pattern. Around 25% of people lived in flats,
while
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 more than half (56%) occupied semi-detached
houses
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, the highest proportion in
this
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 area.
While
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,
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 Detached
houses
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 represented 14%, and terraced homes accounted for only 5%.

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overview
Make a short overview at the start and a short wrap at the end to show the big idea of the data.
coherence
Use clear link words to move from one area to the next, like 'in the Central area', 'in Green Park', and use 'and' 'but' to join ideas.
structure
Keep one list of data for each area so the order is easy to read, for example area by area or type by type.
grammar
Check small grammar issues, like the place of 'However' and the use of 'While' in a sentence.
data
Make sure place names match the chart, and keep numbers exact as given.
data-use
Good use of data to show how Flat, Terraced, Semi-D, and Detached share in each area.
structure
Clear view of trends for each area at the start of each section.
completeness
All data for all kinds of house is given.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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