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The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph provides information about the percentage of the three main reasons why people chose to
work
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 from
home
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, divided by two genders,
males
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 and
females
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, in 2019. The table chart illustrates the proportion of
hours
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 they worked from
home
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.
Overall
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, both genders chose remote
work
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 for saving money as the most popular reason,
whereas
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 the other two reasons showed differences in terms of gender.
In addition
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, we can see a similar tendency in the table, indicating that the figure for working for under 10
hours
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 per week was predominated by
females
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,
while
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 that for over 30
hours
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 was by
males
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.
First,
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the most supported reason to choose remote
work
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 was to save money, which accounted for more than 40% in
males
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 and
females
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 in 2019.
However
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, 24% of
males
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 opted to
work
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 from
home
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 for the sake of productivity, more than doubling that of
females
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 at 11%.
In contrast
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, more than a quarter of
females
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 chose remote
work
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 for the reason of taking care of children. Turning to the number of
hours
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 that they
work
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 outside their workplaces, only 3% of men spent less than 10
hours
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 working at
home
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, which was only half of women who spent more than 30
hours
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 working at
home
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. In terms of 10 to 30
hours
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 working time, there was much less disparity between the two genders, with only a 6% gap.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, home, males, females, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Diagrams
  • Main reasons
  • Work from home
  • Hourly comparison
  • Flexibility
  • Productivity
  • Comfort
  • Work-life balance
  • Percentage
  • Trend
  • Observation
  • Significant
  • Average hours
  • Specific data points
  • Patterns
  • Noticeable differences
  • Summarise
  • Features
  • Comparisons
  • Relevant
  • Gender-based analysis
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