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The graph below shows a comparison between the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows a comparison between the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data
gragh
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graph
 presents a comparison between the
unworker
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number of workers
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 and the
amount
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number
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 of immigrants between 1988 and 2008 . 
Overall
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, from 1988 to
1990
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1990,
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 the
people
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 who
leave
Wrong verb form
left
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the
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apply
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irland
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Ireland
 was stable .
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Fix capitalization
However
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however
Add a comma
however,
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 the
unemploye
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unemployment
 was unstable
but
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, but
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 around 1994 it
is
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apply
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declined dramatically .
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in
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In
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 addition
on
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to
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 what
it
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apply
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is shown
on
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in
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2000th
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2000th,
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 the unworked
people
Use synonyms
was
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were
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 on the same
ring
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level
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 around 6% .
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the
people
Use synonyms
 who
leave
Wrong verb form
left
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there
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their
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 town between 1990 and 1996
was
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were
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 dropped slightly
as
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, as
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 the unemployed
it
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. It
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is
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apply
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might be shown
if
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that if
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 there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 no
Use synonyms
people
Punctuation problem
people,
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than
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then
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will
Correct pronoun usage
there will
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not
Rephrase
apply
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be
a
Correct article usage
no
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 pollution.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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in
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from
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 2000
until
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to
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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2008
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2008,
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 the
people
Use synonyms
increas
Correct your spelling
increased
 sharply from 8% to 14% .
to
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To
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summarize
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summarise
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the
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, the
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 unemployment and
the
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apply
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immigrated
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immigration
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 were the same amount every year
if
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; if
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 they
rose
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rose,
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 they rose together
and
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, and
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 the opposite
it
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apply
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seems right .

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment
  • rate
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • go up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • decline
  • peak
  • high
  • low
  • early
  • late
  • period
  • decade
  • trend
  • change
  • number
  • people
  • leaving
  • Ireland
  • compare
  • contrast
  • similar
  • different
  • together
  • move
  • match
  • faster
  • slower
  • overall
  • point
  • feature
  • level
  • steady
  • fluctuate
  • throughout
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