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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

You recently made reservations at a famous restaurant, but both the meal and service were terrible. The manager wasn't available, and the issue wasn't resolved. * Write an email to the restaurant manager (150–200 words): * Describe the problems with the food * Complain about the service * State how you want the issue addressed

Dear Sir/
madam
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Madam
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, 
 
The purpose of writing
this
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to
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is to
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 show my dissatisfaction towards
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the hospitalities
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hospitalities
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hospitality
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 that I received
last
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 night at your well-known restaurant when you were not available. 
I visited there with my
close-friends
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close friends
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 for
birthday
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a birthday
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 celebration after reviewing
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the feedbacks
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feedbacks
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feedback
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 on Google. We ordered one of the famous
dish
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dishes
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 from your cafe’s special menu:
rice-pudding
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rice pudding
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,
although
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 it was not decorated
it which
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apply
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we shown
on
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in
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picture
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the picture
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and
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, and
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,
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apply
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 the rice was undercooked.
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, the dessert
in
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at
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end
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the end
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 of dinner was tasteless and already melted once it
served
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was served
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.
Besides
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of
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apply
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this
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,
main
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the main
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 course was delicious and tasty. I made
reservation
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a reservation
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 for all of us before
one-day
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apply
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;
however
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, we were not allowed
for dining
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to dine
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 on time despite
rush
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the rush
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 periods. The lady on the front desk was rude
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while
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when
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We
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we
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 asked her
second
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a second
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time
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time,
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 even
if
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though
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 she
promised
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had promised
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 us arrange seats for us after 15 minutes.
This
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 kind of
behavior
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behaviour
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 is totally unacceptable; management should take appropriate action
toward
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against
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 it.
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, the waiters were unaware
about
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of
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ingredients
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the ingredients
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 of most of the dishes and quite slow
of
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in
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 serving
foods
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food
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. 


 Even though good reputation amongst the restaurants in the city,
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overall
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the overall
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 experience was average. I would like to suggest that management should keep surveillance
with
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by
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 installing CCTV cameras
while
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 you are not present.
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, you must have
address
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addressed
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 about inconvenience we faced and compensate us. I hope you
would
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will
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 work on
this
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 and improve your services. Your faithfully, 
 Rushabh Patel

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structure
Organise the letter in clear parts: opening that says why you write, a body that lists problems and how service was, and a closing that states what you want. keep to 150–200 words.
language
Watch tone and language. Use a formal style, fix grammar, and keep verb tense steady.
content
Add can be more facts like the date, time, order number to back your claim.
strength
The letter has a clear aim and asks for a remedy.
strength
It gives concrete problems with examples such as undercooked food and rude staff.
strength
It uses a formal greeting and closing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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