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Band 4

Many city centers these days have traffic flow problems, causing congestion and pollution. One solution is to build fast ring roads on the outskirts of a city, taking traffic away from the centre. While this is helpful in some ways, it also causes new problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Many downtowns have
traffic
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 jams now
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 congestion and pollution. One solution is to construct fast ring
roads
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 on the edge of a
city
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, diverting
traffic
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 away from the centre.
While
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this
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 is helpful in some ways, it
also
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 causes new issues.
This
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 essay agrees with
this
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 statement. Ring
roads
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 are built far from the
city
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 by the government, so that they eliminate the congestion forever, develop the economy and ecology, a security, and
infrastructure
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. I believe that constructing the ring
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 far from the
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,
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 is useful to the ecology and security ,
by
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 some beneficial causes. Obviously, the ring
roads
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 are built for transit cars, so that they can rotate around the
city
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 by the ring
roads
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instead
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 of entering the
city
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 centre and causing a
traffic
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 jam, else
destroy
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 the ecology and security around the
city
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.
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, lorries are heavy
,
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 and not well secured. They cause the main impact to be the
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 jam, and pollute the air. To build the ring
roads
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also
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 brings a new impetus to the
city
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 to be the best else by some ways. There are the infrastructure and the economy. When the ring
roads
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 are built around the edge of the
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, the
city
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 will extend in the future, and
instead
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 of their place, the government will build skyscrapers of high quality.
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, Almaty, one of the best cities in Kazakhstan
with
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 its beautiful mountains. It has a long-lasting
traffic
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 jam which it is still not settled,
it
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and it
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 can't build any skyscrapers. To construct the ring
roads
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, there will be better
.
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conditions.
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task response
Make your view clear in the first sentence and keep it to the end.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph and stay with it to keep the text simple.
coherence cohesion
Add a short opening line and a short ending to show your big idea.
coherence
Link each point to your view with a simple reason.
examples
Give a real example that fits the point and explain how it helps your view.
task focus
You give a clear view of agreeing with the idea.
content
There are ideas on how ring roads can help the city.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic
  • congestion
  • city
  • centre
  • outskirts
  • ring road
  • bypass
  • divert
  • reduce
  • ease
  • travel time
  • journey
  • commute
  • pollution
  • air
  • noise
  • safety
  • benefit
  • drawback
  • problem
  • cost
  • fund
  • build
  • plan
  • design
  • construct
  • maintain
  • manage
  • transport
  • public transport
  • bus
  • train
  • car
  • truck
  • heavy vehicle
  • cycl ing
  • pedestrian
  • policy
  • scheme
  • impact
  • long-term
  • short-term
  • evaluate
  • measure
  • toll
  • charge
  • lane
  • junction
  • connect
  • access
  • green space
  • quality
  • standard
  • equity
  • environmental
  • economic
  • social
  • online
  • integration
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