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The pie chart below shows the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.

The pie chart below shows the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.
The pie chart below represents the multiple kinds of energy creation in France between the years 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, it's clear that gas, coal, and petroleum were the main sources of energy production,
while
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 petrol was the only source that experienced a fall over the period.
To begin
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 with, coal is the largest shareholder in those 2 periods, at 29,80% in 1995 and 30,93% in 2005.
This
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 was closely followed by gas with a percentage of 29,63% in 1995 and 30.31% in 2005.
However
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,
although
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 petrol was ranked 3rd, its shares fell sharply in the year 2005 by about 10%.
In contrast
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, gas and coal remained popular over the years, and they witnessed a slight increase over the years.
Besides
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, there was
also
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 a drastic decrease in petroleum by nearly half.
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, nuclear and other powers where a sum of 10% in 1995 , and they doubled in the year 2005.

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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy
  • share
  • part
  • type
  • year
  • increase
  • decrease
  • rise
  • fall
  • grow
  • drop
  • up
  • down
  • more
  • less
  • than
  • compared with
  • in contrast
  • whereas
  • overall
  • generally
  • largest
  • smallest
  • big
  • small
  • percent
  • in year 1
  • in year 2
  • unchanged
  • stable
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