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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amount of fruit and vegetable in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The bar chart provides key information about
daily
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the daily
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consumed
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consumption
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 of fruit and
vegetable
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vegetables
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 by people in
UK
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the UK
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 between 2002 and 2010. The units are
measures
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 in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that the
heighst
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highest
 proportion of consumption was in 2006 among family members in
UK
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the UK
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,
whereas
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 2002 and 2010
shown
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showed
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 about similar percentages of
consuming
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consumption
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which
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, which
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 are slightly below the amount consumed in 2006.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2002 the proportions of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 had about
identical
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an identical
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 level between 22% and 25% , unlike the children who had the lowest percentage of
consumed
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consumption
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 by 11%. In terms of 2006, the figure shows
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a gradually
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gradually increased
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gradual increase
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 of consuming in fruit and vegetables when compared with the previous year, by 4% in
female
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females
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 and 7% in both
male
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males
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 and children.
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, those
proportion
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proportions
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was
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apply
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fall
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 in 2010 to
reached
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reach
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 26% and 24% of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in respectively,
while
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 the children
appear
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appeared
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decreased
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to have decreased
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 by 4%.

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grammar
Fix small grammar errors. Use proper forms like 'fruit and vegetables' and 'highest' not 'heighst'.
structure
Make one short overview at the start. Then have clear body ideas.
data
Give accurate data from the chart. Do not guess and avoid unclear numbers.
lexical resource
Use plain words and simple form. Check noun and verb in each sentence.
coherence
Link ideas with better flow. Use 'and', 'but', 'however' to join ideas.
structure
Keep one point per sentence. Use two or three sentences for each idea.
content
You give a clear aim and link to the chart.
content
You name groups and the years shown.
language
You use numbers in some lines to show the data.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Daily recommended amount
  • Fruits and vegetables
  • Consumption levels
  • Public health campaigns
  • 5-a-day campaign
  • Dietary trends
  • Economic conditions
  • Awareness of health issues
  • Availability and variety
  • Supermarkets
  • Economic recession impacts
  • Societal norms
  • Dietary patterns
  • Taxation and subsidies
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