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The line graph below shows the number of complaints received by the complaints department of a single airline over a six-month period in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of complaints received by the complaints department of a single airline over a six-month period in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of
complaints
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 received by the
complaints
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 sector of three different kinds of airlines by email/fax, in person, and by telephone. From January to June in 2009.
Overall
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, face-to-face and telephone
complaints
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 started with different amount of numbers.
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, they had a little rise over the
period
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 given,
while
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 email or fax use dropped throughout the six-month
period
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.
To begin
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 with, in January, over 400
complaints
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was
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 recorded by people in real life, and started to reach the peak by around 1800
complaints
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 in June.
Likewise
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, telephone reports achieved by over 800
complaints
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 at the start, by the end of the
period
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, it started to increase by about half. As we can see, email or fax was the second common way to complain in January
accounting
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to
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for
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 above 800
complaints
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 ,but the number of reports dropped in March, and remained stable for the rest of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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