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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information,such as their hobbies and interests,and whether they are married or single.some people say that this information may be relevant and useful.others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write atleast 250 words.

It is considered by some
people
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 that your hobbies, your interests or
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your social
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live
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life
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has
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have
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 a high effect on your
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. Most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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compain
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complain
their
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about their
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work
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 with their private
live
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so
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, so
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 they can be creative and useful
to
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in
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 their jobs.
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agree
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agrees
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 with the statement because
people
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 who have high
realenships
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relationships
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the
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apply
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other
is
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are
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consider
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considered
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 to be high-quality for the job, though some
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does
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do
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 not know
when
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how
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 to
but
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draw but
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lines
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both
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apply
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their
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 and
parivate
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private
live
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life
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. On the one hand,
people
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 who are good with
comuncution
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communication
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are
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 a good quality
to
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for
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 the job. Even in low
jobs
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jobs,
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 you need a good person to help you
to
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apply
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maintain the day and feel less
stress
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stressed
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.
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, a recent study
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showed
 that
people
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an interest
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interest
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interesting
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 personality put the
work
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 on a high level,
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help
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helping
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 the other workers feel happy and have
good
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a good
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 time too.
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,
worker
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a worker
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 with a happy and good
personallity
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personality
 will
effect
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affect
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 the
atmpsphere
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atmosphere
 around them.
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, some
people
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 forget where and when to put a space between their
interest
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interests
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 and
work
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. It is
immportant
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important
 to know the difference between the
people
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 that
around
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are around
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 you all the time and
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people
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the people
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 that only see them
on
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at
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work
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,
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Oxford
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universtiy
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University
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of
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the
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apply
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people
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distroy
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destroy
 their dream job because of some misunderstanding that
happen
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happens
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 between
him
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them
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 and the boss when they
jocked
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worked
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 together.
Moreover
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, you have to maintain a
balanece
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balance
 between your daily life and
work
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. In conclusion, it is argued that
people
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 always mix their
live
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life
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 with their
work
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 and that
consider
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considered
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 a bad quality for
your
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their
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life
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life-work
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work
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. Some
people
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recomned
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recommend
to understand
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understanding
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 the
work
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 first before talking with workers easily.

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task response
State your view clearly. The essay should discuss both sides and give your own view with a reason.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas well. Use short, clear sentences. Use simple words to connect ideas.
content
The writer has some ideas on how work and life mix.
structure
There is an attempt to discuss both sides.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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