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The graphs shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London

The graphs shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London
The provided line graph illustrates the total
number
Use synonyms
 of passengers in
London
Correct article usage
the London
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 underground station from 06.00 to 22.00.
According to
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 the data, the most crowded were at 08.00 and 18.00,
while
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 the fewest passengers were recorded at 06.00 and 16.00. As shown in the figure, the
number
Use synonyms
 of commuters in
London
Correct article usage
the London
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 underground station at 6 in the morning was the lowest, at 100.
This
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 figure rose significantly, soaring to 400 at 08.00, before showing a downward trajectory by around half that
number
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 at 10.00. Towards the next five hours, more individuals were using the train, and
subsequently
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 dropped once more, reverting to its initial
number
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. Afterwards, the station reached its peak again, surged dramatically to nearly fourfold over the following two hours. Interestingly, despite witnessing a fluctuating trend, only about 150 passengers used the underground train at the
last
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operation
Replace the word
operational
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 hour.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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