you need to arganize an affice event in a community center to celebrate the 100th anniversary of the company. write a letter to your owner about 1- request the budget of the cermony 2- explain the importance of event 3- ask hi using the conference room on that date.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request
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that you
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arrange an office event in a community centre to celebrate the 100th anniversary of the company on 18 September 2025. I am requesting you for the cost-effective budget as
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event is very
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crucial
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the company
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company
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reputation and contains various types of cuisine to make the celebration memorable.
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, extra funds are
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becuase
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because
it will be an informal party which contains various
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of games and music. The event holds significant value because
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year not only
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company
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his
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100th
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holds
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sector.
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would be grateful
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if you
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allow us to use
conference
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the conference
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room on 18 September 2025. I truly hope you will look
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matter. I will look forward to a positive response. Yours faithfully, Mansi Deswal

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task response
State a clear budget amount or range and show how you will spend it. Put the cost part in one place and the why in another.
coherence
Use a clear path in the write up. Start with the goal, then list three asks, and end with a short note on why this helps the firm. Put each idea in its own paragraph.
greeting and closing
Your opening and closing are fine for form. Keep a formal tone and check date and spellings.
single idea per paragraph
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Do not put many ideas in one paragraph.
task response
Be sure to answer all asks. Talk about the budget, the use of the room, and the value. Add a simple plan if you can.
suitable writing tone
Check your tone and fix grammar. Use simple words and short sentences.
greeting
The letter uses a formal touch and polite closing.
task focus
It asks for the three main things in the letter (budget, importance, room).
closing
The closing is respectful.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • ceremony
  • anniversary
  • celebrate
  • community
  • center
  • conference room
  • date
  • time
  • availability
  • reserve
  • equipment
  • projector
  • microphone
  • seating
  • catering
  • invitations
  • costs
  • estimate
  • plan
  • program
  • impact
  • morale
  • image
  • reputation
  • approval
  • meeting
  • discuss
  • next steps
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