Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Ohter people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

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school,
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children have to
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a lot of
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like Science,
History
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, Technology and English.
Nowadays
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people discuss
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whether
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we
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should
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consider
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more important than science and technology or not. To be
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honest,
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I have never liked studying
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but
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, but
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at the same
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I have always considered it one of the most important
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, in
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. In
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fact
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, to understand our culture and
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to understand what
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is, nowadays, going on
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let's think about the war between Israel and Palestine,
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it is
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essential to have a great knowledge of our
history
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. At the same time I
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understand those people, who think that
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is not the most important subject, in
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if we think about it, unless we are not
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teachers, we will never need
History
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in our future job,
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if I want to be a lawyer I do not need to know everything about Word War II or about the Berlin wall. Once explained both position I would like to express my idea, in
fact
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, as you have problably undrestood from the previous paragraph, even if I have never liked studying
History
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I have always considered it as one of the most important
subjects
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, not only because it gives us the opportunity to understand our culture but
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because it helps us in developing a new method of
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, which will be very important once at university,
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if you
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at law school to prepare an exam you need to be fast to have a great method and
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to be organised.
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Instead
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for science and technology is usually required a different
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method
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in
fact
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, to
study
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those
subjects
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is necessary
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a lot of practice. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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I would like to say that maybe
History
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is not the most important subject at school
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, but
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,
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trust me, studying it is essential.

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