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The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows
proportion
Correct article usage
the proportion
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 of
people
Use synonyms
 with a higher education, school graduates in science and
share
Correct article usage
the share
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 of
people
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 with other qualifications in Malaysia and
Sigapore
Correct your spelling
Singapore
.
Overall
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,
share
Correct article usage
the share
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 of individuals with higher education in Singapore
suppress
Correct subject-verb agreement
suppresses
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 the percentage of Malaysians. In Malaysia,
proportions
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the proportions
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 of new graduates and
people
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 with different qualifications
higher
Verb problem
are higher
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 by 25% than
that
Correct determiner usage
those
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 of Singapore.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, there is a huge gap in the quantity of
people
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 with a degree of bachelor, 10% of Malaysians and 20% of
Singaporians
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Singaporeans
.
Additionally
Linking Words
,
shares
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the number
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 of
people
Use synonyms
hold
Correct pronoun usage
who hold
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Master's
Correct article usage
a Master's
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 degree is
the
Correct article usage
apply
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exact
Replace the word
exactly
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number of
Fix the agreement mistake
apply
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1% for both
of
Change preposition
apply
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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nationalities.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • qualification
  • science
  • people
  • country
  • degree
  • diploma
  • certificate
  • number
  • compare
  • difference
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trends
  • education
  • job
  • market
  • system
  • total
  • percentage
  • feature
  • report
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