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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
in the beginning iam going to write about the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different
countries
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 , the
graph
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 shows that in the year 1940 all of the
countries
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 were slightly similar the difference was not high , but between the years 1960 and 2020 japan was in strong decline as the
graph
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 shows , and the rest of the
countries
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 where about the same rate , almost in the year 2025 japan was like the rest of the
countries
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 the where not identical but they were slightly the same , suddenly in the year 2040 japan was above every country in the
graph
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 which make it the highest country in the
graph
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, graph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • population aged 65 and over
  • time span
  • initial data points
  • proportions
  • steady increase
  • stagnation
  • decline
  • sharp increase/decrease
  • trends over time
  • fastest growth
  • least change
  • projection
  • predicted proportions
  • societal impacts
  • aging population
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